Does this make sense - written for a Uni Assignment?

Similarities

We are all human

But that is where our similarities end

We breathe the same air

We see the same sun

And for us all

Time never stops

But who are we really?

Blood, bone, skin hair

Black, white, in between

Sleeping, walking

Eating, talking

Your language, my language

Space, distance and silence

I feel hatred and despair

You feel love and joy

I see storms and pain

You see sunshine and hope

A child laughs, a stranger cries

One life begins, another ends

We all walk blindly

Following our invisible path

What we have

Is never forever

Those we love

Gone in an instant

Society conforms

To an invisible God

All bowing down

Afraid to be the one

To take a stand

Freedom comes at the ultimate price

The loss of individuality

He says, she says

Contradiction, lies and blame

Innocence and beauty

Laughter, happiness and delight

Father, son

Mother, daughter

Brother, sister

Friend, foe

Baby, toddler, child

Teenager, adolescent, beyond

Does this make sense - written for a Uni Assignment?

Make sense as far as: can I follow it? Yes. It is a long, tedious, and unoriginal train of thought.

Make sense as far as: does it fulfill your intention? No. In just a few lines, you state your intention better than the poem does. This is an instance of a poem having the cars in order, but the track is missing. My old poetry mentor used to say in this case, "Let the rails that the poem rides on show." Which means, just out and out say your intention so that you can use these images to take you from the beginning to the end.

Does this make sense - written for a Uni Assignment?

Does it make sense? All who respond may have a different opinion on the matter. Define "sense"

I believe "common sense" is not common at all in this world.

I'll admit I know 1 thing for sure. We are all gonna die.

You tell me something. What is this life for if not for dieing?

Lastly, the sun still shines during a storm.

Well none of that answered your question. lol.

What is freedom just a word. I believe you are as free as you want to be. You can stand up every time even if you are the only 1 standing. And will it make a difference in this world. "Maybe". But the fact is this place will still be here long after you and I are gone. I believe it will be a long time before the last human perishes from this place. Thinking of death is just intoxicating. My mind goes wild with wonder.