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Love's Lacking Cry

I never thought I'd have to push and shove,

just for a bit of my father's love.

He never called me 'Daddy's little girl",

Never spun me in a childish twirl.

He never read me a tale from my favorite story book,

Never helped me make a clubhouse in a small corner nook.

He never danced with me in the rain,

Never kissed away the pain.

He never took me to the rink to skate,

But now its too late.

He never crossed the street, and held my hand tight,

never chased away the monsters in the middle of the night.

He never looked at me in awe with pride,

never came to comfort me when I cried.

So how come I feel his arms around me,

after he's died?

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Life's Like That

Cold and grey,

your hair blown astray.

Flustered lost,a windswept sunhat.

It may be confusing, but life's like that.

Nervous with jitters,

heart's butterflies flitter.

perhaps your shy, oh what a drat.

Left in the shadows, life's like that.

Crazy with worry, feeling insane,

riding around, on an non-stopping train.

Not sure of where you're going,or even where you're at,

spun like a spinner, life's like that.

Not feeling well, full of regret.

your feelings are obvious, by your brow full of sweat,

full of remorse, you feel small as a gnat.

It's merely human nature, because life's like that.

Now you're happy and elated,

aren't you glad that you waited?

A tire lacking air, my poem's gone flat.

So here's the happy ending, because life's sometimes like that.

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not bad

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its sweet

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i really liked it. it got me thinking about my dad and how he was never there. Oh now im sad :(

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omg those are sooo good!

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beautiful :]

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they are great, both have the emotional edge to them and really portray feelings quite nicely

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These poems are actually very nice, i enjoyed reading every sentence.

If you made these; congratulations, you may be proud.

I look forward to more poems like these!

Sincerely.

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that dad poem is so sad! it is so good though! but i didn't get the life one

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Those are good! I almost cried from the first one! You definitely have a way with words.

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Your poems express a lot of what seems like your inner most feelings. You like to write, keep at it, you are good. Hopefully the words you write on paper can be a catharsis for what you have been through

(if it's you we are talking about) Maybe even a book of your favorites and most inspired writings will be published?

Andee_sky

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maybe sometime you will find a daddy to do that for you

I hope that happens for you

I had one like that, he stayed too, I was lucky

that second one is very sad, its not too late to change it maybe

make some good strong decisions, maybe it gets better, maybe not

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I like both of them,they're very good.You have alot of talent

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Though a bit depressing, I absolutely love your poems. You are obviously a person who feels things very deeply and can express those feelings beautifully with words. You really can get to the marrow of life and report on it with great detachment. You have a true gift, keep writing and please send them to me if you want someone to appreciate them. I'm copying and pasting these to my computer.

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They're both really good. A good poem exposes your weaknesses that others can identify with and I think you really did that. The first poem I identify with because I didn't really understand why my father did what he did until I became a father. The second poem we all go through, nobody ever really has it all together, we're all just along for the ride.

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I love your poems! Yes, you should definately summit them..

I love the first poem, because it relates the same to my father ( although he hasn`t died..)...

You clearly have a poet`s sense..kindly continue your amazing creation!