What do you think of these 2 poems? Are they ok to submit to my language arts teacher?

Life's Like That

Cold and grey,

your hair blown astray.

Flustered lost,a windswept sunhat.

It may be confusing, but life's like that.

Nervous with jitters,

heart's butterflies flitter.

perhaps your shy, oh what a drat.

Left in the shadows, life's like that.

Crazy with worry, feeling insane,

riding around, on a destinationless train.

Not sure of where you're going,or even where you're at,

spun like a spinner, life's like that.

Not feeling well, full of regret.

your feelings are obvious, by your brow full of sweat,

full of remorse, you feel small as a gnat.

It's merely human nature, because life's like that.

Now you're happy and elated,

aren't you glad that you waited?

A tire lacking air, my poem's gone flat.

So here's the happy ending,

because life's sometimes like that.

Love's Lacking Cry

I never thought I'd have to push and shove,

just for a bit of my father's love.

He never called me 'Daddy's little girl",

Never spun me in a childish twirl.

He never read me a tale from my favorite story book,

Never helped me make a clubhouse in a small corner nook.

He never danced with me in the rain,

Never kissed away the pain.

He never took me to the rink to skate,

But now its too late.

He never crossed the street, and held my hand tight,

never chased away the monsters in the middle of the night.

He never looked at me in awe with pride,

never came to comfort me when I cried.

So how come I feel his arms around me,

after he's died?

What do you think of these 2 poems? Are they ok to submit to my language arts teacher?

Ohh. Those are really good!

The last one is sad. I think you should give them to your teacher. :)

What do you think of these 2 poems? Are they ok to submit to my language arts teacher?

ya its really good but where it says "Crazy with worry, feeling insane,

riding around, on a destinationless train." change insane to remorse

and train to horse

it sounds wayy cooler

but over all the peom is pretty nice your a goos poet and i bet you know it haha

What do you think of these 2 poems? Are they ok to submit to my language arts teacher?

i love them alot and if u dont get A's thats crazy! i truely hope the second poem isnt true tho! yr amazing at poetry and keep up the good work

What do you think of these 2 poems? Are they ok to submit to my language arts teacher?

Wow. Those poems are amazing! The last one is breath taking. I wanna cry. Absolutely submit them. They'll get you a great mark!